Well, it ain't bad. Not that I'm really in a position to judge electronic music since I barely listen to anything in that style outside of the noise/power electronics/avant-garde industrial stuff.
You could find a more creative base drumbeat though. I know the 4/4 kick and the kick/snare (at least I think it's a distorted snare sample you're using) is used a lot in trance for a reason, but adding some more unusual percussion might fit better with the noisy, rolling synths you have in the foreground. Even if it's just adding a few kick-kick-kick-snare or snare/tom sections.
edit: Since we're passing around things to critique, have a read over my WIP story
http://www.fictionpress.com/u/595211/