I think it's good .... do you plan on going for a public book or are you doing it just for fun.. and how old r u?? when you get more send'em to me you intrigued me! i wnat to know what's in sector x man

two errors i found... at least to me.

You've seen the way tear familys apart, and murder without a thought. They are mindless machines. (the way tera familys apart doesnt' sound right)

Those soldiers, lived in Sector X, literally and were allowed to leave headquarters very rarely. (is that literally in the right spot?)


Quote Originally Posted by darkreeverofel
Im a huge fan of the likes of R.A. Salvatore, Terry Brooks, Terry Goodkinde and last but not least, Tolkien. Would anyone mind reading something that I've been working on that is along the lines of their writing?

Thank you to anyone who actually takes the time to read it..

Prelude

Chapter 1 - Part 1

Chapter 1- Part 2.. so far

Characters

Locations