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    I thought since we have a Post your artworks, digital artworks, game purchases, etc..we should have a writing thread.

    Post any meaning quote here, poem, story or something you have written. I'll get it started.

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    Keep in mind when i wrote this i had just read several Stephen King books and murder/mystery stories so don't judge me, i was in a dark mindset
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    Disgrace

    I messed up, I realize this now
    As I gaze around the room
    I see chairs knocked over
    Tables smashed, broken glass
    And of course they are there
    Their bodies, my families
    They seem to be sleeping
    Like a simple, soft nudge will bring them back
    And we can be together again
    But I can see through my own lie
    I know the truth, I killed them
    They lay there, their eyes frozen, mouths agape
    Their faces frozen with the mask of death
    They judge me, they should
    I was their pride and joy
    And I betrayed them
    I tear my eyes away
    The scene is too much
    My vision falls to my hands
    The knife, its still in them
    Even in the flickering light I see it
    The crimson stain of blood, my families
    Shining brightly off the knife
    Dripping ever so slowly onto the floor
    My head spins, I clasp my eyes shut
    The room is silent, terribly silent
    But to me, but to me it is chaos
    I will never be free of those screams
    My families, their fear, shock and confusion
    All their essence channeled into those screams
    It is too much, I rip my eyes open
    Their bodies greet me, mockingly
    Guilt, it fills my being
    I know what I must do
    It will never ease their pain, but it will ease mine
    I lift the knife meticulously
    Thrust it into my brother’s hand
    So cold does it feel, and soon so will mine
    I lift his arm, smiling slightly
    I greet them, in death




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    Sheras May Kill Me.

    Dark Tone is inviting. I haven't really Criticized writing before so I can't really say if it's good or bad.

    I'll Edit this with one of my later writings.
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    Here I am again, on the corner of Classified and Classified. I am a little nervous, and with good reason. As I stand in the middle of this street, I glace to my left and my right. I see a green wooden house on my left with a driveway that starts from behind the house and goes into the street where I am standing on. On m right, I see a different house, this one is abandoned.Staring uncomfortably at this house I notice an white, paint-chipped wall, with a garage that had been burned up to the roof, I turn my head away and look forward. In the distance there is a flickering street light that wouldn't stop flickering, or stay on-- It kept me afraid!-- I keep on looking. Focusing my vision I stare at a dimly lit field of green, riddled with trash. (hold On.)
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    It's dark, but it's interesting.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sword Of Time View Post

    Sheras May Kill Me.

    Dark Tone is inviting. I haven't really Criticized writing before so I can't really say if it's good or bad.

    I'll Edit this with one of my later writings.
    Your pretty far down on my list, dont worry about it

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    OK this one may be a little sappy, but this is something I wrote for my now girlfriend of 3 years before we first got together.

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    The moth gets closer and closer

    It knows it should fear

    Like most events in it's fleeting life,

    It knows how easily it could be burned.

    but it's ravishing beauty draws the moth in.

    It longs to be near.

    To see the radiant light.

    To feel the warm and passionate embrace.

    It knows the dangers,

    it has been here before,

    but the temptation is to strong,

    it just can't resist.

    It's longing increases each and every night.

    It can no longer fight.

    It gives up it's plight.

    as it turns the last time,

    on this the darkest of nights.

    The moth is drawn.

    drawn toward the flame.

    I am just the moth,
    and you (her name) you are my flame.

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    let me know what you guys think sorry I'm not really good at writing, but am a hopeless romantic at heart.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Knightshade View Post
    OK this one may be a little sappy, but this is something I wrote for my now girlfriend of 3 years before we first got together.

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    The moth gets closer and closer

    It knows it should fear

    Like most events in it's fleeting life,

    It knows how easily it could be burned.

    but it's ravishing beauty draws the moth in.

    It longs to be near.

    To see the radiant light.

    To feel the warm and passionate embrace.

    It knows the dangers,

    it has been here before,

    but the temptation is to strong,

    it just can't resist.

    It's longing increases each and every night.

    It can no longer fight.

    It gives up it's plight.

    as it turns the last time,

    on this the darkest of nights.

    The moth is drawn.

    drawn toward the flame.

    I am just the moth,
    and you (her name) you are my flame.

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    let me know what you guys think sorry I'm not really good at writing, but am a hopeless romantic at heart.
    I liked it. Yes it has a basis in romance but i don't think its sappy at all. More leans towards curiosity and willpower.

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    roses are red, rhyming is hard
    i made this in seconds, aren't i a tard?

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    Aww.Knightshade, It's sweet poem. It's not sappy, it's very sweet.

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    A bit long, but this was a prototype chapter for a superhero deconstruction I've been wanting to write. Probably redo the first chapter down the line.

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    My head…fucking hurts. Feels like its splitting open. What the hell happened last night?

    Wait, where the hell is this? Looks like hospital stuff, all the tubes and machines. The heart monitor isn’t working. Neither is anything else. Dim in here, looks like the florescent light on the ceiling is fucked up. Looks like the door on the right is too, window even broken apart.

    Okay, so I was at Jim’s bar, doing my night shift, telling Jordan’s old man off, talked to Swiss, dealt with those fucking annoying twins…and nothing.

    Door fell apart pretty easily, hate to see what did that. Hall is just as trashed, like Jim’s bar at Christmas when Swiss had that flashback. Crazy bastard. Don’t see anyone or hear anyone. Only sound I hear is a bunch of lights shorting out. Walls smashed open, ceiling on the floor, blood in a few places. No bodies though. I’m alive and my room was in better shape than this mess…guess they passed me up. Doesn’t look like any of the other rooms were being used. There’s one with some equipment, but whoever was in it is long gone. Maybe the lunatic who did this?

    Shit, I think I got caught up in super villain business. Well, this room is pretty well lit, has a nice sofa. TV seems to be working, damn miracle. My legs feel a bit weak, might as well sit for a moment and catch up on the news, get the date. Turning it to channel four. The date in the little scroller thing is five days off from my last memory.

    Great, five days missing from my memory. Looks like someone kidnapped me. Not sure why they would bother doing that. I mean, it’s not like I’m anywhere close to important. Guess they picked some poor sob for some sort of illegal experiment. I’d fit that bill.

    …huh. That’s weird. The shadows in this room…they look different. Completely black. Almost solid looking. My shadow is going over the table, makes it pure black. I can see the remote’s shape, but the color is just gone. Guess I better turn that TV off and get moving, find something to eat and ge-HOLY SHIT!

    …what the fuck!? My…my hand just went in my shadow! How the…it felt cold…did I do that?

    …I wonder. If I stuck my head in, what would I see? I could use the shadow of the TV dangling from the ceiling, if it works that way. So, let’s see what’s in here…and this is fucked up. Looks like the room in a negative of an old photo. There’s even shadows here, but they’re pure white, kind of weird. And it feels…good. I don’t feel tired in here.

    This is like one of those old comic books I read as a kid. I think that’s another plain, like it’s this world but not. I bet if I touched the white shadows there, I’d appear in that spot here. Or I’m on something really fucking powerful. Still, I felt better there. If I go in there, I could get out faster.

    Wait. The fucked up rooms and hall, missing for five days, in a hospital. This sounds like a bad sci-fi flick. Shit, I think I was experimented on. I have super powers…I have to tell Sammy. This could open some doors for us; finally start really paying some bills. I mean, it’s a stealthy power, so I’d be hard to find…

    “THIS JUST IN! A fight between Shining Eagle and the villain Hawk has broken out! The Jaspers Group skyscraper has been horribly damaged…”

    …oh yeah. I’d have to fight super heroes. Jim’s old stories always lead to some sort of huge medical bill after fighting those guys.

    …I just got a kid’s fantasy and it’s ultimately going to bring me misery. Fucking fantastic. Well, no reason to worry about that right now. Sammy is going to have my head; she always gets pissed when I’m late. I doubt she thinks I was kidnapped after how I knocked in Iron’s jaw. “Oh, I done got super strong skin” and you also had soft teeth. Well, enough with this place better check a map and get out.

    _____________________________________

    Weird, that hospital is right next to the neighborhood. Some powerful people must have pulled some strings. Something tells me they were vaporized for it, what with the missing bodies. Maybe I was spared because I was on that other plain when that attack happened? Like, I fell into that shadow and then the lights went off, no more shadows, back to the real world. Ehh, fuck it. I need a drink. Hope Jim doesn’t cut my pay.

    Did manage to find my hoodie, though. Keeps my face hidden well, don’t like gathering attention from the bastards I throw out. There was a lot of other stuff too, guess I wasn’t the only one there. Looks like the bar hasn’t changed while I was gone, just hope those twins aren’t there. Wade and Howard, the two most annoying fuckers in the planet. They’d be all over me for information if they saw a glimpse of that shadow trick.

    Well, might as well go in. First thing I see if my boss, ready to greet me with a cold beer.

    “Looks like you’re finally back, Nate.”

    “Yeah. Came back different, I’ll tell you that.”

    Jim used to be a super villain in the 70s and 80s, called himself Heart Breaker. Dumbest name on the planet; used the name because he used to get all the ladies, or he says. He’s really damn strong and pulled off some robberies but reformed in the 90s, never told me why. He’s seen so much weird shit that nothing fazes him, plus Swiss keeps bringing me along for side jobs that keep me away for awhile. Guy’s pretty damn black and says everything like an old jazz musician, mellow and deep. Gained some belly over the years, but pretty well built, has a nasty scar across his face. He’s pretty damn cool and pays me well for simple work.

    “Hey Jim, you see Sammy around?” I take a swig of that beer, goes down right.

    “She actually came around here looking for you, first time for everything. You forgot to call her?”

    I finished off my beer. I drink pretty fast when I’m worn out.

    “Wasn’t on a job. Think I was kidnapped. Woke up in a fucked up hospital. Oh, and that’s not even the best part.”

    I put my hand into my shadow. Jim just shrugged.

    “That’s how I got my super strength. Small world.”

    Jim has a weird past. I’m pretty sure he helped a bunch of super powered guys fight off a robotic invasion once. I think the only way I could surprise him was if I had a gender change and grew giant horns on my head with blade hands. Or I’m just not creative enough to think of something that would freak him out.

    “Well, I’m going to go see Sammy now. She’s going to be pissed and then in shock…”

    “Good luck with that. Oh, and if you see that crazy bastard Swiss, remind him to pay his tab.”

    I walked just around the corner. My apartment is pretty close by. Noticed Jordan jumping across the building tops like normal, have no idea how he manages to do that. No super powers or anything, just fucking crazy. Taking the elevator to the second floor…and just my luck. Wade and Howard. The two are dressed as usual, dark red suits with black pants and neatly combed hair. White gloves too, always creeped me out a bit. They’re information brokers and know about most everything in the city. They also think everyone’s a fictional character and keep acting like they’re self aware parodies. It gets really old, really fast.

    Think I’ll just bypass them. Jumped into my own shadow when no one was looking, entered the other side. They’re still there, but they seem oblivious that I’m around. Looks like my theory was right. I’ll just take the stairs and avoid anyone, meet with Sammy. She should be in.

    Reach my door, 204. Door is scratched up, bullet hole in the corner, bad wallpaper everywhere. Home sweet home. Does look different in this other plain though.

    …did I just hear something? Sounded like a whisper, lots of them. Must be my he-oh shit, I did not just imagine that. I saw something, pure black with swirling purple marks. Whispering is getting louder and I’m not crazy enough to stick around to learn more about those fucking things. Better jump back in.

    …and back to the real world. I do not want to meet those things again. Guess they live on that side, so I can’t stay in there too long or they arrive. Well, it’s a better weakness than a glowing rock. Fuck it, better just get inside. We don’t lock the door because no one has the balls to mess with my Sammy. Girl has one nasty gun collection.

    Open the door and there she is, strait blonde hair in her black coat and pants combo, barefoot because that’s just how she hangs out at home. She also has a rifle pointed at me, but that’s nothing new.

    “Hello Nate. So, what’s with the missing for five days thing?”

    “Liste-”

    And she shoves the rifle in my face. She won’t fire, finger isn’t on the trigger. She’s pissed though, so she may hit me with the bottom.

    “What the fuck did Swiss have you do this time!? What the fuck takes five days!? And not a single call!?”

    She’s not going to let me get a word in edgewise, so I think I’ll just speed this up. I put my hand into my shadow on the door and she begins to realize I probably wasn’t gone for nearly a week of my own will.

    “…Jesus Christ, Nate…how the fuck are you doing that?”

    “I’m not exactly sure, but I’ll try explaining it if you would get the gun out of my face.”

    I spent the rest of the night talking, explaining everything. She listens intently to every word; holds my hand the whole time. The whole gun thing makes it look like she beats me, but we’re actually pretty close. I’ve never been gone this long, so I can’t blame her for being so pissed since I’m usually missing to extort cash from scam artists for whoever the hell Swiss works for. Seeing her face again feels right. Her brown eyes are familiar and comforting, even if they’re filled with paranoia. We’re two train wrecks hopelessly in love, kind of depressing and uplifting at the same time, huh?

    “Nate, is anyone after you?”

    “I doubt it; I think the guys who kidnapped me are all dead. Or forgot me. Came back just fine. Besides, Jim was pretty mellow about it all.”

    “Jim is bat-shit crazy, even compared to us. His brain had to have been scrambled, what, three times?”

    “Well no one is breaking down our door. Even if they did, I could just take you with me and sneak away.”

    “So, what are you supposed to do with this?”

    At this point, I just realized my life had changed for good. I mean, I have this weird and kind of horrific power, someone kidnapped me and may still be out there…it’s like god wants me to be a superhero.

    I’d do that if I wanted a bunch of lunatics in masks trying to kill everyone I know. So that’s out of the question.

    “…I could always scare the crap out of Jordan’s pa.”


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    Quote Originally Posted by Jack Spicer View Post
    roses are red, rhyming is hard
    i made this in seconds, aren't i a tard?
    This deserves a shot at the Nobel Prize.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mao-nax View Post
    This deserves a shot at the Nobel Prize.
    I'd vote for it.

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    Something I wrote a while ago that got published in a Writer's Magazine. I definitely don't believe its the best it could have been but apparently its good:

    Spoiler warning:


    since it couldnt be over 1500 words many of the ideas i wanted to add to this story couldn't fit. and keep in mind, im only like 15.





    The Poet of the Lake

    Once a day the bay moves in a chaotic swirl giving off an intense feeling of danger that scares the fish into the nearby caves. At the bay’s end, the ocean, using its brutal and rough force, thrusts in hundreds of more fish around the bay, and once the waters calm, the fish finally return to the surface in a great dense pack, only to be caught and eaten by the many fishermen waiting for their catch of the day.
    Suddenly, lots of fishermen rush out swarming in stampedes with their newly made, grand designed boats with great fishing hooks and claws that seem as if they have the ability to catch fish from the heavens. However, one of these fishermen isn’t as excited as some of the others. He simply rows out there with his small boat and his nets at his side with little interest in actually fishing. The truth is that this fisherman isn’t a fisherman at all, but rather, a poet with a lethargic attitude and a simple lazy lifestyle. He brings with himself a notebook to maybe write some poetic words. He is a very poor man whose only love in his life is the beauty of poetry and so he comes to the bay not to be a fisherman and fish, but to be a poet looking for a beauty to write about. Each day he comes back only to be ridiculed by the others, who accuse him of lies because he calls himself a “poet.” In fact, he never works hard enough to write a good poem. Many even argue that he should find something else to do besides write poetry, like fishing.
    While he was sitting there, with his fishing nets and rods on his forsaken wooden “Titanic” another fisherman pulls up beside him with a recent successful catch.
    .“Excuse me, Sir, I see you’ve been very successful so far; would you mind sharing with a poor man like me?” said the poet with a humble, bad actor’s voice.
    “Look here, ‘poet’,” replied the large, dark skinned man with his full net of fish. “These fish are mine and mine only. I put a lot of hard work getting these and I’m not going to give them to a man who is too lazy to catch his own. Look! You can get at least fifty fish that are at least five pounds each if you just try to catch them yourself!” and so he leaves, for he doesn’t want to be involved with a lazy person like the poet.
    The poet simply shrugs and walks in another direction with his small boat dragging behind him. He finally goes into the water but comes out only minutes later, bored, sitting in his boat waiting for fish to appear. All men need to do work, but this poet doesn’t care about that.
    That evening the poet goes to his small house in the forest near the bay, a one-door, two- room wooden place with a chimney that doesn’t even reach the height of the tree branches growing next to the house. The poet enters his room where he has placed several shavings of wool on the floor as a bed. He lies on the floor reviewing his whole life, “I am a man who simply sits in the seats of the theater of society but can never watch and understand her shows,” he thinks to himself. His ideas are deep, but he never works hard enough to write them clearly. So instead of his words being considered profound, he is often ridiculed and disliked for his failure to complete his goals. Just a do-nothing, that’s what the people dislike about him. If he is to not be a hypocrite, then he must work hard at everything he does.
    He decides he has to go out to fish again, and this time he will work hard at fishing, although fishing for him is mainly a hobby, not a job. “My hypocrisy will end,” he thinks to himself, “tomorrow is a day that will be an interesting one,” and finally, he sleeps.
    The next day is, indeed, an interesting one. He races out to the bay with his equipment along with the other fishermen. This time he really works on finding a beauty for his poetry.
    In the span of only forty-five minutes, the poet has made many successful catches, but suddenly the boat starts to sink with his fish in it. He realizes that the boat’s old hull is too worn out for the overwhelming weight of the fish to rest in its shell. He starts to panic; he rushes, moving his hands frantically around the boat attempting to keep many of the fish in the boat, but they just continually flip back into the lake’s warming waters. “All of my success”, he thinks, “is it going to escape?” Fortunately for him, not all of his fish have escaped, for the poet miraculously manages to hold on to some of the smaller fish, stuffs them in his jacket and journeys home.
    At home he reflects on his annoying day. Feeling frustrated after what has happened, he roughly takes the fish out of his jacket and prepares to cook them near the chimney. He cuts the fish open only to find an odd looking coin that shines brightly in the darkened house. The poet feels a lot better, and returns to cutting, ignoring the coin. He then starts to stare at the rest of the fish that are still uncut and lay on his table. The beauty of the fish soon goes from lines, to pictures, to colors, then to words in the poet’s head. The poet quickly writes down his ideas in his notepad before they disappear from his mind. The beauty he has been looking for has finally been found. He sleeps for a period of time, then wakes up the next morning to go to the marketplace to buy an old rowboat with the coin he has.
    The marketplace is packed that morning, but the poet wants to share his poetry with the rest of the townsfolk to show that he really is a poet and not some poor man without any work ethic.
    He finds a new cheap boat to buy before he goes to show the town his new poetry. He walks up to the merchant selling boats and the poet shows him the coin he has found. The merchant’s jaw drops in surprise.
    “These boats don’t cost that much, Sir! Are you sure you don’t have a smaller coin?” the merchant asks. The poet is in disbelief that the coin is of very high value. The merchant has become so excited to see such a rare coin, he forgets to pay attention and insists the poet take a boat for free. The poet immediately becomes rich after getting the value of his coin, and many people start to notice him and start asking him questions like, “How did you get so rich?” and “How can I become wealthy like you?” Many mistake him for a man already with wealth. Soon, however, the poet starts to worry that he may never express his poetry. He quickly stands on the tall rock where people are gathered...
    “Look here, people! I have poetry to recite to you that I have created myself!” shouts the poet. The people turn, confused at first, but they listen closely, and more closely. Suddenly his poetry becomes well loved by the people, so much so that he becomes famous in the region. He keeps fishing as a hobby and he creates more and more poems about the fish of the bay. Soon the poet lives on knowing that his success has inspired others and gives life to literature. No more will the poet be an outcast from society or a man known as lazy by the people. Success and hard work has led the poet to greatness.



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    This is just a little comment on the writings posted...

    Quote Originally Posted by Sheras View Post
    I'll get it started.
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    Disgrace

    I messed up, I realize this now
    As I gaze around the room
    I see chairs knocked over
    Tables smashed, broken glass
    And of course they are there
    Their bodies, my families
    They seem to be sleeping
    Like a simple, soft nudge will bring them back
    And we can be together again
    But I can see through my own lie
    I know the truth, I killed them
    They lay there, their eyes frozen, mouths agape
    Their faces frozen with the mask of death
    They judge me, they should
    I was their pride and joy
    And I betrayed them
    I tear my eyes away
    The scene is too much
    My vision falls to my hands
    The knife, its still in them
    Even in the flickering light I see it
    The crimson stain of blood, my families
    Shining brightly off the knife
    Dripping ever so slowly onto the floor
    My head spins, I clasp my eyes shut
    The room is silent, terribly silent
    But to me, but to me it is chaos
    I will never be free of those screams
    My families, their fear, shock and confusion
    All their essence channeled into those screams
    It is too much, I rip my eyes open
    Their bodies greet me, mockingly
    Guilt, it fills my being
    I know what I must do
    It will never ease their pain, but it will ease mine
    I lift the knife meticulously
    Thrust it into my brother’s hand
    So cold does it feel, and soon so will mine
    I lift his arm, smiling slightly
    I greet them, in death



    What do you think?
    Well... it is kinda gloomy, but I know there are a lot of metaphores there.

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    ...r-right?


    Some parts of it made me recall about a poem I wrote in my "teens"...
    ... it was a little sad, and your writing clearly expresses sadness too, or
    at least some angst towards some... particular episode in your life?
    (I will stop guessing. )

    And...
    Sword said: "Sheras may kill me..."

    Quote Originally Posted by rok124 View Post
    Something I wrote a while ago that got published in a Writer's Magazine. I definitely don't believe its the best it could have been but apparently its good:

    Spoiler warning:


    since it couldnt be over 1500 words many of the ideas i wanted to add to this story couldn't fit. and keep in mind, im only like 15.





    The Poet of the Lake

    Once a day the bay moves in a chaotic swirl giving off an intense feeling of danger that scares the fish into the nearby caves. At the bay’s end, the ocean, using its brutal and rough force, thrusts in hundreds of more fish around the bay, and once the waters calm, the fish finally return to the surface in a great dense pack, only to be caught and eaten by the many fishermen waiting for their catch of the day.
    Suddenly, lots of fishermen rush out swarming in stampedes with their newly made, grand designed boats with great fishing hooks and claws that seem as if they have the ability to catch fish from the heavens. However, one of these fishermen isn’t as excited as some of the others. He simply rows out there with his small boat and his nets at his side with little interest in actually fishing. The truth is that this fisherman isn’t a fisherman at all, but rather, a poet with a lethargic attitude and a simple lazy lifestyle. He brings with himself a notebook to maybe write some poetic words. He is a very poor man whose only love in his life is the beauty of poetry and so he comes to the bay not to be a fisherman and fish, but to be a poet looking for a beauty to write about. Each day he comes back only to be ridiculed by the others, who accuse him of lies because he calls himself a “poet.” In fact, he never works hard enough to write a good poem. Many even argue that he should find something else to do besides write poetry, like fishing.
    While he was sitting there, with his fishing nets and rods on his forsaken wooden “Titanic” another fisherman pulls up beside him with a recent successful catch.
    .“Excuse me, Sir, I see you’ve been very successful so far; would you mind sharing with a poor man like me?” said the poet with a humble, bad actor’s voice.
    “Look here, ‘poet’,” replied the large, dark skinned man with his full net of fish. “These fish are mine and mine only. I put a lot of hard work getting these and I’m not going to give them to a man who is too lazy to catch his own. Look! You can get at least fifty fish that are at least five pounds each if you just try to catch them yourself!” and so he leaves, for he doesn’t want to be involved with a lazy person like the poet.
    The poet simply shrugs and walks in another direction with his small boat dragging behind him. He finally goes into the water but comes out only minutes later, bored, sitting in his boat waiting for fish to appear. All men need to do work, but this poet doesn’t care about that.
    That evening the poet goes to his small house in the forest near the bay, a one-door, two- room wooden place with a chimney that doesn’t even reach the height of the tree branches growing next to the house. The poet enters his room where he has placed several shavings of wool on the floor as a bed. He lies on the floor reviewing his whole life, “I am a man who simply sits in the seats of the theater of society but can never watch and understand her shows,” he thinks to himself. His ideas are deep, but he never works hard enough to write them clearly. So instead of his words being considered profound, he is often ridiculed and disliked for his failure to complete his goals. Just a do-nothing, that’s what the people dislike about him. If he is to not be a hypocrite, then he must work hard at everything he does.
    He decides he has to go out to fish again, and this time he will work hard at fishing, although fishing for him is mainly a hobby, not a job. “My hypocrisy will end,” he thinks to himself, “tomorrow is a day that will be an interesting one,” and finally, he sleeps.
    The next day is, indeed, an interesting one. He races out to the bay with his equipment along with the other fishermen. This time he really works on finding a beauty for his poetry.
    In the span of only forty-five minutes, the poet has made many successful catches, but suddenly the boat starts to sink with his fish in it. He realizes that the boat’s old hull is too worn out for the overwhelming weight of the fish to rest in its shell. He starts to panic; he rushes, moving his hands frantically around the boat attempting to keep many of the fish in the boat, but they just continually flip back into the lake’s warming waters. “All of my success”, he thinks, “is it going to escape?” Fortunately for him, not all of his fish have escaped, for the poet miraculously manages to hold on to some of the smaller fish, stuffs them in his jacket and journeys home.
    At home he reflects on his annoying day. Feeling frustrated after what has happened, he roughly takes the fish out of his jacket and prepares to cook them near the chimney. He cuts the fish open only to find an odd looking coin that shines brightly in the darkened house. The poet feels a lot better, and returns to cutting, ignoring the coin. He then starts to stare at the rest of the fish that are still uncut and lay on his table. The beauty of the fish soon goes from lines, to pictures, to colors, then to words in the poet’s head. The poet quickly writes down his ideas in his notepad before they disappear from his mind. The beauty he has been looking for has finally been found. He sleeps for a period of time, then wakes up the next morning to go to the marketplace to buy an old rowboat with the coin he has.
    The marketplace is packed that morning, but the poet wants to share his poetry with the rest of the townsfolk to show that he really is a poet and not some poor man without any work ethic.
    He finds a new cheap boat to buy before he goes to show the town his new poetry. He walks up to the merchant selling boats and the poet shows him the coin he has found. The merchant’s jaw drops in surprise.
    “These boats don’t cost that much, Sir! Are you sure you don’t have a smaller coin?” the merchant asks. The poet is in disbelief that the coin is of very high value. The merchant has become so excited to see such a rare coin, he forgets to pay attention and insists the poet take a boat for free. The poet immediately becomes rich after getting the value of his coin, and many people start to notice him and start asking him questions like, “How did you get so rich?” and “How can I become wealthy like you?” Many mistake him for a man already with wealth. Soon, however, the poet starts to worry that he may never express his poetry. He quickly stands on the tall rock where people are gathered...
    “Look here, people! I have poetry to recite to you that I have created myself!” shouts the poet. The people turn, confused at first, but they listen closely, and more closely. Suddenly his poetry becomes well loved by the people, so much so that he becomes famous in the region. He keeps fishing as a hobby and he creates more and more poems about the fish of the bay. Soon the poet lives on knowing that his success has inspired others and gives life to literature. No more will the poet be an outcast from society or a man known as lazy by the people. Success and hard work has led the poet to greatness.

    This one was very interesting. I think you can actually take a lesson or two from that.
    (and the coin inside the fish detail made me remember of an excerpt from one of the Gospels... )

    Just a thing, if I may, you said you were "like only 15", but is that presently or when you wrote it?

    Quote Originally Posted by Knightshade View Post
    OK this one may be a little sappy, but this is something I wrote for my now girlfriend of 3 years before we first got together.

    Spoiler warning:


    The moth gets closer and closer

    It knows it should fear

    Like most events in it's fleeting life,

    It knows how easily it could be burned.

    but it's ravishing beauty draws the moth in.

    It longs to be near.

    To see the radiant light.

    To feel the warm and passionate embrace.

    It knows the dangers,

    it has been here before,

    but the temptation is to strong,

    it just can't resist.

    It's longing increases each and every night.

    It can no longer fight.

    It gives up it's plight.

    as it turns the last time,

    on this the darkest of nights.

    The moth is drawn.

    drawn toward the flame.

    I am just the moth,
    and you (her name) you are my flame.

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    let me know what you guys think sorry I'm not really good at writing, but am a hopeless romantic at heart.
    "A hopeless romantic at heart..."

    That definitely gets my approval.

    Anyway, while I can agree that it might be a little "sappy" too, it is the feelings
    behind that really matter. It has a little drop of a "suicidal aura" of some sorts,
    especially because, if you take the analogy a little more to the literal side, the
    moth will die in the flame... but then again that is what the moth wants...

    (I understand the paradox... )

    Oh, and moths also give you an extra "plus" in my opinion. Really, they are cute.

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    Also, can I place one or two of my writings (poems) even if they are in portuguese?
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    I might as well post that thing I sent Elin the other day. I'm bored enough, I suppose. Keep in mind I wrote this at least 3-4 years ago.

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    I. 12 years ago

    I casually step into the florist's shop as thoughts of her occupy my mind. Roses are cliché - but I know she loves them.

    The guys asked me what they should prepare for the bachelor party. I've told them a million times that I don't drink.

    I'll also need to pick up the ring in an hour or two. I'm a bit nervous, obviously, but who wouldn't be before a proposal? This is one of those 'once in a lifetime' things, right?


    II. 5 years ago

    It's around 4am. I come home late, the faint scent of her perfume still lingering on my clothes. It's not the first time, nor will it be the last.

    She must've suspected it for a while now. I study every small detail on our giant living room carpet to take my mind off the fact that she's shouting at me. I'm staring at its colorful patterns so I don't have to look into her eyes, welling up with tears.


    III. Two days ago

    The heat's killing me, even in the shade of this lousy open-air pub. The woman I'm buying drinks for now is not the same one I confessed eternal love to all those years ago.

    I take one final sip from my beer while forcing a smile on my face to tell her we're about to leave.

    With the cold beverage still in hand, I stare at my fingers for a moment - the spot where my wedding ring used to be. She notices my brief silence and asks what's bothering me without looking up from the magazine she's sifting through. I lie to her that it's nothing important. I wipe the sweat from my forehead with slow, tired motions, wondering if things are all right this way.

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    Quote Originally Posted by foggy_han View Post

    Also, can I place one or two of my writings (poems) even if they are in portuguese?
    Yes, you can, foggy.

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