Strongbad, you should use more variance in sentence length. A couple equal length sentences in a row sounds monotonous, and longer sentences (while avoiding run-on territory) feels better while reading.
Yeah I know, it is too early though. I should have some time later to edit it. Hopefully I will get around to doing that.
Originally Posted by Sprung
You guy are welcome anytime We have bowling and Steak & Shake. Bring beer. I like beer.